tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post135059686574731094..comments2024-01-19T10:55:32.829-08:00Comments on Summer Rain at Mountain View or Silicon Valley: In My Head (Short Story Slam Week 19)Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hallhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01546696605935159862noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-36314242863584822792012-03-02T19:10:49.324-08:002012-03-02T19:10:49.324-08:00I like the tension between the stillness and the m...I like the tension between the stillness and the motion. The staying put and the moving on. Nice, reflective piece.Elaine Danforthhttp://elainedanforth.wordpress.com/2012/02/20/i-stand-poised-to-open/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-11779297481629998402012-01-27T16:12:54.425-08:002012-01-27T16:12:54.425-08:00You may not have detonated but this poem took off!...You may not have detonated but this poem took off! Good work!Mark Butkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04028422696260495656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-42924499657343086892012-01-22T16:20:57.823-08:002012-01-22T16:20:57.823-08:00Very nice. Thank you for sharing. Blessings.Very nice. Thank you for sharing. Blessings.Just Be Realhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15815210059310140144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-79433089021106122392012-01-22T13:13:35.586-08:002012-01-22T13:13:35.586-08:00There are so many wonderful elements in this piece...There are so many wonderful elements in this piece..why must we dye our life...cryptograms to decode...Nice work!!Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-71526244421458745042012-01-22T10:10:26.731-08:002012-01-22T10:10:26.731-08:00An awesome poem, thanks for sharing it. Thank you ...An awesome poem, thanks for sharing it. Thank you for stopping by! Happy and gorgeous new week to you. Greetings from Rio de Janeiro/Brasil. Please come back soon!Nelsonhttp://nelsonsouzza.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-38982725807714966352012-01-22T04:31:23.268-08:002012-01-22T04:31:23.268-08:00great imagery thank you for sharing xxgreat imagery thank you for sharing xxAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10624767707167052328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-17114331618551663062012-01-21T21:09:05.227-08:002012-01-21T21:09:05.227-08:00Love it , great job.Love it , great job.Carolinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14698815527301107339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-89239762526748457632012-01-21T14:26:56.200-08:002012-01-21T14:26:56.200-08:00I admit I'm not really a poetry buff but there...I admit I'm not really a poetry buff but there are pictures in my inner vision that have been invoked by your poem. <br />I see a young girl desperate to move on and see the world, someone who wants to be like the swallows who rejoice in the freshness of the wind on a starless night as they playfully travel from north to south and back again.<br />A girl who is tired of trying to please other people instead of discarding the dead leaves of her life, making way for the fresh growth in the coming season.<br />I see her wanting to lift her eyes to the creator instead of being stuck with only what can be seen, tired of the hopelessness of negativity. <br />I see pictures when I read this poem.<br />A good read, Geoff.Geoff Maritzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15182608110318394094noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-66280349609955163032012-01-21T13:31:30.750-08:002012-01-21T13:31:30.750-08:00Great poem. I love the last line.
Here is my entr...Great poem. I love the last line.<br /><br />Here is my entry:<br />http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/12/sorry-performance-poem.htmlJack Edwards Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11813177533690643652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-16589647968125321642012-01-21T07:14:48.965-08:002012-01-21T07:14:48.965-08:00Great work!! inspiring!Great work!! inspiring!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-35987315618615782972012-01-20T23:55:58.839-08:002012-01-20T23:55:58.839-08:00I have to say that I agree with ayala. The entire ...I have to say that I agree with ayala. The entire poem is quite something, but these words caught hold of me:<br /><br />My mind is listless,<br />The wind is flirting with the starless sky<br /><br />I can see it and even though my mind doesn't know quite which way to go, it follows the wind and the smell of Autumn as together they flirt with the sky. <br />This made me see some wonderful pictures in my mind. Thanks so much for sharing. <br /><br />http://elizena-lovingmycreator.blogspot.com/Elizenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05749011867923005914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-69069147374696586172012-01-20T21:21:07.408-08:002012-01-20T21:21:07.408-08:00thought provoking lineS!!
Looks like a lot is go...thought provoking lineS!!<br /><br /><br />Looks like a lot is going on in the mind of the person in poem .. <br /><br /><br />We are organizing a prompt based writing contest with loads of gifts. <br />Kindly drop in to enter the same at <a href="http://becomingprince.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow"> Another Author </a>Abhishekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03633374524540097827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-9169285593709867912012-01-20T20:37:38.783-08:002012-01-20T20:37:38.783-08:00I agree some lovely lines..well doneI agree some lovely lines..well doneAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12489264697266150220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-83564654503136107492012-01-20T18:53:16.949-08:002012-01-20T18:53:16.949-08:00Some lovely lines in this one. Very nice!
http://...Some lovely lines in this one. Very nice!<br /><br />http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/l-angel/Marbles in My Pockethttp://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/l-angel/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6600431574581674215.post-530941444398323872012-01-20T17:27:06.363-08:002012-01-20T17:27:06.363-08:00I like the wind flirting with the starless sky...l...I like the wind flirting with the starless sky...lovely!ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.com