Wednesday, April 6, 2011

Alone Together (4 Thursday Poets Rally Week 41)


Alone together,

For worse or for better,

No need to know your past,

No worrying about your look,

Let the cold fire blast

so that written words hook,

Miserable happiness will enlighten the darkness,

Alone together,

That’s joyful terror,

Alone together,

No other phrase to say it fairer,

Alone together,

No way to surpass the wether.


*****


73 comments:

Emily said...

This made me smile. I like your use of binary oppositions, "cold fire, " "joyful terror." thanks for sharing!

thingy said...

'Alone together.' So true.

Terrific poem, Jingle.

Umamaheswari.A said...

Hi I could see a lots of oxymorons here too starting from alone together to cold fire,Miserable happiness and joyful terror ...hmm..hope oxymorons got you now :)

Enjoyed it!

Rajlakshmi said...

I loved the phrase alone together ... that speaks so much :)
wonderful write :D that was a fun read.

marit said...

beautiful, also love the image

Vinay said...

reading this, a doubt arrives - were u inspired by Uma or Uma by you? ;) coz oxymorons fill here :D hehe! nicely said, Ji :)

poetsandall said...

amazing poem Jingle. I loved it

K McGee said...

Beautifully juxtaposed.

magdalenahermanstories said...

Love this! A song of the opposites:) Alone together... I can sooo much relate to that

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Nice play on words at the end.

I also like the picture; playful and colorful, and who doesn't love the beach?

(Nice legs too!) ;)

absolutepalaver said...

"Miserable happiness"...something so common in life. We seek what is comfortable...even if it is misery. I really like this piece, Jingle.

teric said...

Another poem of oxy's. So well expressed Jingle.

JL Dodge said...

I'm am, yet again, in awe of your write ! Very nice !
Happy Rally
JL&B

Jack Edwards Poetry said...

Great us of juxtaposition. Really enjoyed the poem.

Jerri said...

Loved your play on opposites. cold fire
alone together, etc. Life is but dualities.

dthaase said...

great play on words...well captured

Paulami said...

in awe... "alone together" ... loved that bit as it keeps on playing in your head..

pandamoniumcat said...

Being alone together...can be good and sad . Great poem!

ayala said...

alone and together can be ....and is in so many relationships...

a sojourner said...

thought this had a subtlea ring of truth to it...

ChrisAu said...

Love it !!!

Tarang said...

Just now I've learnt about Oxymorons from 'Inside my Poem book'- Uma's blog and, I could see many of them here. Nice and interesting:)

Jingle said...

I learned, we learned from NAPOWRIMO,

they posted a prompt for Day 5,

thanks for commenting..

deadpoet88 said...

I love this, lovely imagery, and I like how you've made solitude sound like it isn't solitude at all. Wonderful poem!

bendedspoon said...

I love this alone together! :)

cybermushroom said...

alone together with only your love! that is surely the best thing! this is nicely done! i felt the emotions conveyed. nice choice of words and rhyme! i love it!

please check mine too: "Beyond Silent Wars"

Krislin Neo, Ting (Syracuse Pike) said...

Alone together.. Yeah, just being alone with the one-self... Lovely write.. :) :)

Maitreyee Bhattacharjee Chowdhury said...

Alone together..what a thought! loved it

sam said...

loved the use of all the opposites... great poem Jingle..:-)

Aashi said...

cute poem....it has a rhythm

Chim's World of Literature said...

Just those two words in your title....can tell so much....
alone together...miserable happiness, enlighten the darkness...
these are things, feelings that happens too so many...

sam373 said...

whimsical, intentionally strange; resembles an uncommitted heart.

trisha said...

this poem is really amazing ji, wise, deep and full of true love.

trisha

fiveloaf said...

a new style by ji.. my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/

Parsley said...

Along together...I experience that often.

ssina said...

wow Jingle! this is beautiful. I can say with confidence that this is my favorite piece from you. so nice, with a touch of something i usually don't sense in your poetry...
Lovin it ;)

liv2write2day said...

Yes, we are alone, together. Good use of oxymoronic thinking.

glh said...

Fabulous use of antithesis - and so subtle that I keep noticing more and more.

Thank you for continuing to share and inspire!

Thoughts Not Lost said...

Well done!! I really enjoyed reading!

Adam said...

Lovely poem, I really enjoyed this :) Thank you

Krisse said...

Beautiful and light. I too learned about oxymorons from NaPoWriMo, they're handy:D

sweet pea. said...

oh thats pretty

M. A. S. said...

I love "joyful terror, alone together."

To me, you made a poem that was sad, yet simultaneously celebratory.

Very nice.

tasithoughts said...

I love the "Alone together" imagery.

Great work, Ji!

JP

ds said...

Yes, cold fire, alone together, joyful terror. Well done! (and true)

okoatokewa - the poet said...

i love this poem as it plays so such on emotion and affection....great poem.

Butterflies of time said...

Enlightning as well as thought
provoking! such clever word combinations.

Alcina said...

'Alone together'

Such a interesting thought penned down very nicely..

The title and the poem both are superb!

kez said...

cool feel every long term partnership can identify with this, some of the time LOL

booguloo said...

You made me laugh cry! Smiles

mihirvatsa said...

Comment? My comment? There are already 50 comments for this post... and I don't think people comment on something they don't like. :)

Cheers!!!

Blaga said...

Even together, we are still alone. So true! Lovely Ji!

Rekha said...

Beautiful use of antonyms. Lovely, meaningful poem.

Wellspring Of The Soul said...

Very nice Jingle!! I hope you have a happy Friday!! Blessings!

C Rose said...

Such a beautiful melody in this piece. I just wanted to be "alone together" with someone...very nice work! ~ Rose

beccagivens said...

Great one, Jingle ... you always amaze!

1meremortal said...

Alone together...flowed with a unique harmony. Excellent poem.

Bing (PinkLady) said...

this is so sweet and rhythmic... well done, ji!

http://pinklady-bing.blogspot.com/2011/04/remembrance.html

meirozavian said...

Its true Ji "alone together"
Im back. nice to join again.

Someone is Special said...

'Alone together', loved it Ji.. here is my rally poem... a dream she is... a kiss seals...

Someone is Special

Amity said...

I like this one...does your being alone together you mean it literally?

Wonderful thoughts...and made me think how to be 'alone together'!

abthomas said...

Great write - love the "alone together" concept, it speaks so much truth in those two words.

Lolamouse said...

Yes, sometimes we are both elated and miserable when in love!

Gloria said...

You are a master wordsmith using phrases that jolt the mind...fantastic!

Me! Of Course said...

I love the wordplay! Miserable happiness, I like that a lot.

frayedges said...

The contradiction in terms is delightful!

deep said...

Liked the oxymorons, just like everyone else mentioned.

'Let the cold fire blast
so that written words hook' - I specifically jumped at this line.

mypastmademe said...

'Alone together' ... a contradiction in terms, but can be so true. Love this :) (by the way, my 18 done, will peruse the others at leisure!)

April Denton said...

Very sweet poem, beautiful picture as well.

bee said...

i love that..."alone together"
well said jingy, i loved it!

Missy said...

I enjoyed the repetition of the line "alone together" unity comes about from those two words :) great stuff.

Reggie said...

Very nice write Jingle...oxymorons, binary oppositions, whatever you choose to call them...good work is what I say.

gossamercy said...

Joyful terror and alone together just sound so splendid together. I loved this, thanks for sharing!