Friday, May 27, 2011

A Short Story In 55 Words on Salt Lake City




Jim got a job offer at Salt Lake City! A dream comes true!

He grinned BIG as he imaged hiking in snow-covered mountain in July, swimming naked under a cave, and toasting mush-mellows near camping fire...

Lucy wished to follow him, but her mother has breast cancer and needs her...

Thoughts jumble, Lucy couldn't go.

*****

Flash Friday 55 at G-Man’s


Short Story Slam Week 2

19 comments:

Fiducia said...

Nice theme! Touching and creative..

Akelamalu said...

A sad conclusion to a dream job -very well told in 55 words.

MorningAJ said...

That's very sad.

Charles L. Mashburn said...

This is a great study in how to say a lot in very few words. So many emotions hitting so fat and furious.

Charles L. Mashburn said...

Obviously--I hope--"fat" should have been "fast". Some typos can be quite funny!

Charles L. Mashburn said...

I'll get this right yet!!

Amanda said...

I thought a Centus was a challenge but saying so much in just 55 words...you did a great job with that!

G-Man said...

jingle Belle...
Thanks for the 'Story'.
After all, thats what Flash Fiction should be.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End

Rajlakshmi said...

awww that's such a touching story...
beautifully written Jingle

Nelson Souzza said...

Thank you for stopping by! I really do appreciate your taking the time to leave a comment...I read each and everyone of them. I hope your day is a good one and that you will come back again soon. Take care. Nelson Souzza :)

Lu Ann said...

Awww this is really, really sad!
I liked a lot your story though it made me feel sad :)
Nice story Jingle! You´re very talented. Thanks 4 everything.

Caroline said...

Great job even though it is sad.
Well done

mindlovemisery said...

So many conflicting emotions but such is life. Wonderful take on the theme

Ina said...

Sad story, good job :)

Lolamouse said...

Such a sad story in such a small package. sniff.

Jessica Prescott said...

A sad little ending, well written

Old Raven said...

Well done Jingle ... it had all the elements of a good story.

Elizena said...

Very well done. You told a complete story in so few words. You expressed joy, excitement and sadness. I enjoyed it very much. Blessings!

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Helena said...

Compassionate story. It can be trying caring for a sick relative, but the heart usually holds out!