Sunday, January 15, 2012

In A Place Where The Ocean Is Deep and Wide



In a place where the ocean is deep and wide,
Lonely soul greets the hungry tide,
Unspeakable things
scream in silence;
Broken wings
search for solace;
Deserted strings
haunt those died in violence!
This fairy
is NOT very merry,
This story
is Not that cheery,
This moment
is so very scary!
Brain-storms flood,
Thoughts stretch,
Let’s pray to God
and redo our sketch.

47 comments:

Caroline said...

Beautiful <3
Have a wonderful weekend.

mihirvatsa said...

The poem is good.

The starting takes off with infecting a sense of pathos in a reader's mind. Gives a kind of warning that the things are not going to be a fairytale as you continue reading.

The middle portion attracts attention with its simple short and recurring style.

The end portion really ends well, by the way. In a sense of hope. Thats good, indeed.

Best regards Ji,
Mihir

Joanne said...

hauntingly scary. Blessings, Joanne

Judith C Evans said...

Beautiful. Love the way the poem ends with prayer and the chance for a new beginning.

TALON said...

Hope you are having a lovely weekend, Jingle. This was sad. Seems the bad fairies run amok too often in this world.

imnotaverse said...

If only we could just start again.

Fiducia said...

A new beginning...an awakening...let's redo the sketch!! Perfect for today's world where we seek solace in all around us!

Chim's World of Literature said...

this was so beautiful, like a lullaby..amazing as always Jingle

Dave King said...

This appealed to me very much. I appreciated the open-endedness.

Poetry Road said...

I really enjoyed how the words had a building of momentum feel! Just like a storm would! Great!

abthomas said...

Fanstastic write of harsh rue!

Nadira Cotticollan said...

Sometimes, on e wonders..is it too late to redo the sketch and stop these visitations ? But then what is life without hope?Lovely poem.

mindlovemisery said...

Fabulous job! This is one of my favorite poems you've written =)

Andy McDonald said...

I like the factthat in the poem you talk of it being serious yet it flows as though it is more playful. Brilliant poem.

Kathe W. said...

Terrific take.

Victoria said...

There is something poignant in this that reminds me of the losses we think about today.

Andy said...

Hello Ji.

Great contrast between all things doom & gloom at the beginning and then the whisper of hope at the end.

Nicely done!

alivealways said...

Nice message to make, arrive at change!

Old Raven said...

This is clever ... draws you into the poem.

Charles L. Mashburn said...

Nicely done! It kind of builds and crashes on you like a wave, tittering and sighing as it fades in the end.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

That was beautiful!

Rachel Hoyt said...

I think I like this fairy. Beautiful words. Happy Potluck!

Judie said...

In July, I am going to where the ocean is deep and the ocean is wide. I will give you my thoughts then.

Thanks for your comments on my post!!!!

Judie said...

Thanks for your comment on my post. You should get into the game. You have much to offer.

gautami tripathy said...

Loved it...!!

jingling chains

Judie said...

You are such a gifted poet! Thank you for all that you contribute to our life on this planet.

xinex said...

Beautiful poem and picture!..Christine

nana_ang_poppaphil said...

Great work, very haunting but with a sense of hope at the end.

saurabh modi said...

the imagery is so amazing,....!
reminds me of the song lazarus by PT,which is unspeakably beautiful....

damn awesome...!!

lunawitch15 said...

so very intense. :)

Lyn said...

This is so primal..I feel it in my bones..

Kim, USA said...

That is beautiful!

thingy said...

Terrific write, Jingle. : )

~L said...

Ok... So I just got done telling someone that their post was my new favorite of the month.... But this one... Tis is breath taking and simply amazing!!!!! I love it!

Aditi Chauhan said...

Beautiful!!!!!!!

Jannie Funster said...

I like that one can always redo the fairy ocean story on an etch-a-sketch and make everything merry again.

xoxo

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Geoff Maritz said...

To me, not being a poet, just an interesting story with a very lovely picture to illustrate it. I'm glad you included prayer and God. Thanks, I'm sure He will appreciate that.
God bless and may you keep on writing for us for a very long time, Geoff.

Marbles in My Pocket said...

I love this. You have painted a word picture of the picture. Nice!

Jacqui Binford-Bell said...

I often wonder when poem and illustration so fit which came first. It would be hard to separate the two.

Chèvrefeuille said...

Wow! This is such a wonderful poem.

Tweety said...

Lonely soul greets the hungry tide,
Unspeakable things
scream in silence;
Broken wings
search for solace;

Loved these lines the most....Beautiful work :)

Summer Rain said...

an old piece.

hope that you enjoy it.

~L said...

!!! My favorite!! This was BEAUTIFUL... I feel more in love with it as each line was read. ...and that captivation picture... wow.

My soul felt and emotion that can not be named...

~L

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

nice i would like to think such moments leads to prayer. good choice of an ending. However the poem it's self was very powerful.

Http://bsain.wordpress.com/ said...

brain storms flood... LOVE that line!

magdalenahermanstories said...

Absolutely love it! It's great how your words seem to have a faster pace with each line. Amazing and touching story...