Under the vast sky,
A girl aged eight
enjoys her apple pie
and feels great.
.
Your bombs fall
And set her house on fire,
She never understands at all
What is your desire.
.
Being the only one survived,
Her spirits are gone;
Her memories are never revived,
What can you do to correct the wrong?
*****
This is a fiction written for G-Man’s Flash Friday 55, it is not inteded to offend anyone or criticize anybody, but to highlight the sad side of wars.
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38 comments:
that is so sad. i am so moved by this, and i would not worry about offending anyone. this was just beautiful. great 55
All war is so sad. I agree, this is beautiful. Not offensive. Great 55 Jingle! And thanks for reading mine earlier!
poignant
This was bittersweet. I think it's okay to criticize war, and war - makers.
Jingle Belle...
How many 55's are you writing today?
Moving 55..
Thanks for playing and have a Kick Ass Week-End
A beautiful poem Jingle. The sadness is so wonderfully wrapped in the lines.
Very beautiful !!
Caroline
its so beautiful =]
Very beautifully said, the pic is so appropriate, you can see the pain in her eyes. hugs.
Very poignant!!! Very much so. Whoa...sad, true, but still loving and giving in your 55 words.
Here's mine
Hope you can find time to visit.
Happy Friday
Happy weekend.
i feel sad when i saw the pic and read the poem....sorry wasn't able to visit other blog last thursday rally.... I was in a seminar...more power to u ji
I'm not sure it is possible to correct past 'war' wrongs. Wouldn't it be wonderful if no wrongs were ever committed again. Heartfelt 55 Jingle.
regards,
Eaton
very sad- hope the apple pie sustains her- thanks!
i so agree with you, what can they do to undo the mindless deed they did?
trisha
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The innocent victims of wars...
Beautifully expressed, Jingle.
A moving 55, Jingle.
So true. We don't even know what is done in our name. Thanks for the write.
There are innocents in war. Excellent 55, Jingle.
This is a very emotional 55 my friend and very well written. War is definitely sad. You did well. Have a great weekend :)
Sad, thought-provoking. I'm not sure her wrong can ever be corrected -- it is too grievous. We can try...
So moving!
makes me wonder, aren't we all innocent?
Sweet and sad at the same time. Thanks for stopping by.
think it's never possible to make things unhappened but to start anew and try making things better..war is a sad thing and way too many people are suffering
powerful and love the pic...
Very touching
This reminds me of a book I read called German Boy. It is the story of a refugee family in WW2. The author was just a child and wrote his memories. A very good read. I learned about the book from Herr Jung in Bacharach, Germany. He is a tour guide there and also was a boy in WW2. He was brought to tears as he relayed the story again even after all these years. So sad.
Appreciate you sharing.
No not offensive at all. Very poignant and effective.
I read this shortly after viewing "God's Soldier", a documentary on the Military Channel. It is the story of a chaplain in Iraq and his struggle to maintain a unit's morale while, at the same time interacting with townspeople and minimizing loss of civilian lives. This poem made a heartbreaking connection for me.
Oh.. a very tight 55, Jingle... but very nicely written! The message totally came across! And very interestingly, my 55 this time was already related to war.. :(
I wonder what inspired us thus...
I don't think war has any side other than sad. Citizens of all nations should criticize war as often and loudly as possible in the hope that the only wars ever fought are to end a far far greater evil, than the war itself. And i know a lot about war..
And yes it is a moving & beautiful poem too.
Oh my God Jing, Its one of the most beautifully innocent and touching poems I ever read. Simply reaching for ur heart in one go
Sorry! I figured it out - Thank You xoxo
Hmmm - that would not make sense as my first comment did not come out - I was thanking you for the award nod and asked how to vote myself - until I figured it out! LOL. Thank you for all of your kind support, xoox
Wonderful antiwar poem, Ji.
Perfect.
Thank you for writing and poeming.
Wow, very powerful statement! Loved it!
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