Sunday, November 20, 2011

The Hourglass Life (Change, Short Story Slam Week 15)




While I’m withheld on the top part,
I feel intense and strong,
As I fall down to the lower part,
I go inspired and hope for a restart.
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Grains of sand I’m considered as,
Don’t you think I’m grain of children,
Feeling timid for changes,
Yet, I must accept the ups and downs life arranges.
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Randomly,
We encounter and squeeze to be the first,
You and me,
We are forced to visit the virtue of friendships, wisdom, and honesty.


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50 comments:

Brian Miller said...

i like the middle stanza...it bears the weight of truth for me...and has a nice flow...

Claudia said...

accepting the ups and downs is a key i guess...and nice play on the hour glass..

Heaven said...

yes, life is full of ups and downs... and nice metaphor of the hourglass life ~

kaykuala said...

Wise words Cello, and children must be led by the hand for some while.

Hank

1MereMortal said...

"Grains of sand I’m considered as,"

Excellent expression of just how finite life can be...really enjoyed your poem.

thingy said...

Ah, so true. A very wise piece. : )

manicddaily said...

So interesting to compare grains of sand and grains of children. Life a long journey (we hope.)

K.

Teresa Marie said...

This is so lovely, and honest. I love it!! Blessings, Terri

Daydreamertoo said...

And when it all reaches the bottom, life somehow flips it upside down and it all begins agsin.
Lovely.

Andy said...

Hello.
"Feeling timid for changes,Yet I must accept the ups and downs life arranges.." how true those words are for many of us.
Nice imagery.
Thanks for sharing & visiting. I appreciate the comment.

Beautiful Woman Of My Heart

Old Raven said...

Cello ... you are so right within your words here. These: "We encounter and squeeze to be the first," especially struck me.

Pat Hatt said...

Ups and downs you portray them well, great verse.

Susie Clevenger said...

as i fall down the lower part, i go inspired and hope for a restart..so much truth...nice work

Sheila Moore said...

you send many messages of truth and hope and also the hardships of change here. enjoyed each line.

bodhirose said...

I love your use of the hourglass to illustrate the changes of life. Very creative--especially when mentioning children.

DeLi said...

i enjoyed the way you concluded your poem

Mary said...

Nicely written and arranged poem!

Dave King said...

Yes, well said. And what is it about being the first that so motivates us?

rch said...

This one's got some grit ;-)

turtlememoir said...

Nice metaphor, I like it - the fullness, the narrow passage, the breath of acceptance that begins life in its various aspects... Well done.

Victoria said...

What a great metaphor. Thought-provoking poem.

willowdot21 said...

I love the way the poem flows, pun intended. I also like the reference to the ups and downs of life. lovely.xx

California Ink in Motion said...

I love the ups and tolerate the downs. Great flow and tons of truth.

Yousei Hime said...

Thank you for the visit to my blog. I like the image you chose through which to frame this poem. No way there isn't change going on in an hourglass, unless turned on its side.

tinkwelborn said...

like the double entendre message here.
great replication of what a grain of sand might think.
cool idea. thanks.

Kay said...

Change is difficult to accept, yet in the struggle, we still fight for the climb to the top. An amazing write. Thank you!

Jyoti Mishra said...

lovely it is
Awesome verses, deep meaning and brilliant message !!

Kweschn said...

Excellent! Change is important! :)

Neni said...

nicely written... and thoughtful one... :)

Miriam Sagan said...

Thank you!

Celestial Dreamz said...

truth and wisdom beautifully packed in lovely verse ...

magiceye said...

beautifully crafted!

Ella said...

Wow, I can so relate to this hour glass feel! Cello you painted the mood so well, with your imagery!
I love these lines:
"Grains of sand I’m considered as,
Don’t you think I’m grain of children,
Feeling timid for changes,
Yet, I must accept the ups and downs life arranges"

I can so relate to this stanza; so well said!

Ruth said...

This is very nice!

A Lady's Life said...

you are very insightful. It's all about reaching a different plane.
As we learn and grow more and more we will one day reach the plane of enlightenment we were meant to be in.
:)
Happy Thanks giving :)

Kim, USA said...

Beautiful words! Thanks for the visit.

Kim, USA

Marbles in My Pocket said...

A well said analogy of the sands passing through the hourglass. Nice one!

http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/11/23/the-last-grain-of-sand/

Myrna R. said...

So nicely stated. Lovely poem.

dakshi said...

lovely....
"Feeling timid for changes,Yet I must accept the ups and downs life arranges."
wow....

keiths ramblings said...

All we need it to have someone to turn our hourglass over now and then. Delightful

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Interesting metaphor!

Star said...

Very nice poem. Thank you for your thanksgiving wishes. Take care. Keep writing.

JBSTUFF said...

Hey Jb here just wanted to say that
Thanksgiving was great. I want to thank you for visiting and leaving a comment.

Charlie Parant said...

the ups and downs of life...we all have them, best to accept them.

mylittlewordz said...

I like the use of up and downs, with the sand also being up and down in the timer.Intentional?
Jamie

kez said...

wise words poetically put ....thank you x

Guilie said...

Great flow here, both of words and the sentiment behind them. Thank you for sharing.

William Leed said...

The first stanza sets up the poem very nicely. Very enjoyable.
William

Suzy said...

Nicely imagined. Loved your last line. Thanks so much for visiting my blog.

e.a.s. demers said...

Some profound truths in this one! Well done :-)