Sunday, November 13, 2011

A Magpie Tale




Look at me,
Am I real?
Where am I?
Why shall you stop by?
.
Come join me,
A Big deal,
No need to be shy,
since we must be reminded our freedom pie.
.
The air is screaming with death,
Please wheel me through this place,
Chair by chair,
until  my rebirth.

64 comments:

Laurie Kolp said...

Wow- I love the ending.

Monika said...

Enjoyed much.

Other Mary said...

I didn't see that end coming. Cool.

Thoughts Not Lost said...

I like the splash of hope you added at the end there. Great job!

Amy said...

very nice.. Thanks for stopping by... Jingle?

Umamaheswari said...

Beautiful poem..cool

anthonynorth said...

Excellent last line.

christopher said...

surreal and more surreal as it goes.

Bethe77 said...

The serching of who one is? Im not sure we every fully do....or do we?
Blessings

Grace said...

intriguing write... i like it ~

Lena said...

Yup! That last line delivered indeed!

Andy said...

Hello.
I wasn't expecting that ending.
Very well done!
Thanks for sharing.

Imaginary Dreams

Susie Clevenger said...

Great work....love the ending!

Classic NYer said...

I had to read this a few times actually... and yeah the ending was surprising. Nicely done. :-)

Larry, aka The Kid and The Old Goat said...

Something both eerie and alluring.

Larry

Tess Kincaid said...

Nice write!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow. your last stanza packed a punch. Great interpretation of the prompt.

zongrik said...

good ending

manicddaily said...

Intense ending. Very interesting. K.

Lord Emmanuel said...

When I read from a familiar writer, I know. Good to read from you again.

And oh, wonderful thought. The muse was very imaginative here.

Cheers!

dan roberson said...

When the present questions are unanswered hope springs eternal. I enjoyed the questions and the dash of hope at the end.

Marbles in My Pocket said...

Nice one!

Daydreamertoo said...

Full of vivid imagery. Wheel me chair by chair.
Great write!

lonelyrecluse said...

Very powerful ending, great read.
The Lonely Recluse.

Anonymous said...

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liv2write2day said...

The last stanza is chilling...could stand on its own, but works well as a whole, too.

Arnab Majumdar said...

I've been wondering about what to write for this particular prompt for a while, and I've had a bit of a tough time till now... you, however, made it seem so simple :) Beautifully written...

Cheers,
Arnab Majumdar
ScribbleFest.com

Jo Bryant said...

the ending was a surprise

rch said...

I agree with other comments that the ending really takes it to another level.

kez said...

surreal and great write ...thank you x

halfwaybetweenthegutter said...

The ending is perfect, totally unexpected.

Brian Miller said...

nice ending on this one...ji

William Leed said...

Very enjoyable. Made me think!
William

thingy said...

Indeed, the ending is a wow. Terrific.

Teresa Marie said...

I have to add my agreement with the others on the ending, wow! Great job. Blessings, Terri

Tumblewords: said...

Intriguing piece - well played!

emily wierenga said...

that last stanza... wow. gripped me by the throat. powerful piece.

Claudia said...

since we must be reminded..of freedom..and of life...nice ending also

Amropali said...

beautifully blended with the picture. :)

Nicholas V. said...

A poem that transports to a halfway place between worlds and lives. Great take on this intriguing Magpie.

Dave King said...

Love the way the first verse prepares the way for the last. There is a real sense of conclusion.

Tarang Sinha said...

This is nice and really different:)

paulo guimaraes said...

Beautiful write hon!

Susie Clevenger said...

So beautiful...the ending a total surprise

stephaniesattic said...

Surreal and a little disturbing. I like it! :)

Rohit said...

i loved the deep emotions u embedded in this poem..wished it was a little longer..u left me asking for more!

lynnaima said...

haunting, lovely pic as well :) thanks for the visit!

blackswanpoetry said...

the last stanza is very nice

moondustwriter said...

A chilly ending

Sheelonee Mukherjee said...

what i was looking at is your choice of words you know and i find this attractive that simplicity can convey complexities. :)

chiccoreal said...

Chilling yet in that chill of the fog rebirth! I love how you sensed the feelings behind the image!

Becky Sain said...

Excellent -- and the ending!

Lilly said...

i'd say you managed to capture quite well the essence of the image - very well done!

Madeleine said...

This is quite an evocative piece.

Friko said...

Grand effort.

Publish Poetry said...

questioning self and existence!

clariice said...

I like the magpie's tale.
Freedom pie as you name it. Lovely!

ds said...

Wow. "freedom pie" and such a brilliant ending. Thank you.

Adura Ojo said...

Killer last stanza. Works beautifully; so unexpected. Great job!

rudraprayaga said...

lovely.mind-catching. sarala [prayaga]

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

I enjoyed it... Nice!

JJRod'z

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John Evans said...

Lovely poem! I especially enjoyed the last four lines; beautiful work and a lovely blog. Thank you kindly for stopping by.... au revoir!

Elizena said...

Am I real? Where am I? Questions I've asked myself; at first feeling that I was without help or hope and then like the ending of our poem;

The air is screaming with death,
Please wheel me through this place,
Chair by chair,
until my rebirth.

I found that in spite of the pain and the end of all I thought I needed and wanted; there was only better waiting for me.
Very well done. Blessings!

http://elizena-lovingmycreator.blogspot.com/