On a cold and dark evening, she pushes her baby stroller, walking home.
Someone is following her.
Her heart races, daring not to look back.
Arriving at the stairway, she stops, hurrying to take her baby.
Just as she is about to scream, she hears a male's voice:
"I know you're scared, I'm your neighbor."
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27 comments:
It's always so creepy, this feeling you get when you think you are watched.
Nice 55!
Excellent. He should have said something earlier. :) Well done. Have a great weekend :)
Very nice, but I agree he should have said something earlier. what a horrible feeling. have a great weekend. take care.
I am giving you a standing ovation! Wonderful!!!!
Excellent!!! Love a surprise ending!!! Whew!!! So relieved it turned out happy, too! Hello, dear Jingle...you have visited me several times now...I'm beginning to feel like we are friends ;-)) I'm not going to be commenting much for a few weeks here in July...will be busy with summer holidays, etc. But I'd like to follow you. I hope you don't mind...and when I'm back to commenting again, you will hear from me...I promise! ~Janine XO
I am so glad it turned out okay! I was scared reading! Awesome 55, Jingle.
Jingle ....
Superb!....."I hope you don't dislike it"
GREAT 55
This was intense and very good. In my opinion, one of your best.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End....G
So scary!!
Simply wonderful once again !!
Caroline
Not a nice feeling being watched, not to be reccomended.
Yvonne.
Nerves on edge waiting for what will come next Nice ...
Joanny
you might want to change the word sacred to read as scared.
Have good week end.
Wow. This was quick and scary. I am just glad it turned out to be the neighbor. Though, he could have said that before.
Hey, some neighbours can be VERY scary (grin)! Nice 55.
a very scary 55 always be careful :)
good one. :)
You had me going there! Great short composition! Happy 4th to you as well!
:) The Bach
Nice to know good neighbors still exist...ones smart enough to know when they've scared you.
Well done Jingle. Great 55. Blessings.
Great one Jingle.
Happy weekend.
You suffuse such tension and a feeling we've all had into only 55 words, and it works marvellously, Jingle :D
meeting our brothers and sisters in the dark can be a wake up call for sure. nicely done.
creepy 55! nicely done :)
A dark shadow emanates, what could this be?
I keep moving forward as I do not turn to see
I race along more rapidly as fast as I can
I cannot move faster my horror won't make me stand
I take more of a leaping stride in pace
I Now turn around, OH YES I know that face....
enjoy Jingle and Happy Saturday to ya(+)
soulbro*:)
you did a great job creating tension and realeasing it
great writing that is a pretty wild post with fear.. Have a great weekend..
Great post. Love the intensity and that the ending leaves it ambiguous as to whether it's a good thing or a bad thing that it's just her neighbor.
I agree with Okie. Waiting for the next chapter to see if the neighbor is good or evil!
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