Thursday, March 10, 2011

Big Tent Poetry In 55 Words






Boyish smiles on face,
Tangled hair shows grace,
Without question, dreams creep
in her sleep.
Typically, there may be a ship
with parties and gasps,
There may be a partnership
with defying parades,
No flames seen unless you knock her thigh
and wake her up to clarify,
If she's mad,
Everything is a secret, unsaid.




This is an entry for the following: G-man’s Flash Friday 55, Big Ten Poetry, And Writer’s Island: Secret

32 comments:

versebender said...

Well, Jingle...I see you can kill two (make that three birds) with one stone. You create a wonderful image of a "happy place"...and woe to anyone who might disturb. Very nice job, and thank you for visiting my site. Vb

magiceye said...

lovely 55

thingy said...

This is beautiful, Jingle. I have not read all of your work, but this is my favorite, so far.

Really wonderful.

Alice Audrey said...

If you tell her you were watching her sleep, she'll still be mad.

irene said...

You've blended the words like magic!

liv2write2day said...

They give fun prompts at BTP. That one was last week's...you did great. This week's prompt was posted on Monday and it's to write a science poem. With your math background that should be a piece of cake!

haikulovesongs said...

wonderful.

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Wonderful Jingle , it may be only 55 words but the magic was there,

Yvonne.

Tilly Bud said...

Nice job of using the Wordle.

City Share said...

I don't think I've ever come across a poetry blog before. Was your challenge to use 55 words? Beautiful results.

nan said...

This is fun to read! I enjoyed the rhyming, use of the Wordle words, and using 55 words! Nicely done!

Ami Mattison said...

This is a fantastic portrait! I especially like the last two lines. She definitely sounds familiar with her angry secrets. Great 55!

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Dreamy... perfect.

~Laurie

Jade said...

Lovely dreamy scene you've captured here... :) I like the last line a lot.
Thanks for your comment on my poem, "Offering"

Jerry said...

Jingle, who would dare disturb what dreams may come? Oh, well.
Nice one and the word box is fantastic!

Myrna R. said...

What a wonderful way to respond to all the memes. Great job.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

"Everything is a secret" - love it!

Rajlakshmi said...

in 55 words you expressed so beautifully!! wonderful

Akelamalu said...

Loved it!

TALON said...

I love how you worked all those words in, Jingle. And created a really neat 55!

flaubert said...

Three prompts! Pretty darn good, Jingle.

Pamela

G-Man said...

You are very inspired this week Jingle Belle.
Your creative juices are flowing.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

rafifuck said...

I like this, very much. Thinking of my love as she sleeps - the expressions on her face, as I assume she thinks of me - of course it is me. But yes, to get the final answer, I must wake my love, and oh how I love her.

Caroline said...

Lovely

Eden said...

Nice 55. Love it.

Linda Jacobs said...

Sweet! I like how the secret is unsaid. Dreams are personal.

trisha said...

beautiful poem ji, dreamily crafted.

Tumblewords: said...

Well wordled!

Paulami said...

oh this is good!

James said...

Well done. I enjoyed the wistful quality of this.

Brian Miller said...

it is the unsaid things that scare me the most...haha...how many blogs do you have?

kshawnedgar said...

Well done. I enjoyed it greatly.