Friday, March 18, 2011

Big Tent Poetry/Thursday Thinking Tank in 55 Words-Life Could Be So Unaffair




Lila cried her heart out.
Her hubby was hit by a crane
and is gone,
Leaving her and her unborn baby alone...
He had been a gentleman,
Everything was perfect in between
until the earthquake,
Now She wanted to scream,
But does that help?
Life could be so unfair,
She murmured, eyes making empty stare.




This is my entry 4 Flash Friday 55 at G-Man’s,

Thursday Thinking Tank at Poets United: Hope

Belinda’s Hope Effort

and Big Tent Poetry: Stuck /New Hope,

I added this post to Magic In The Backyard's wish Jar: Magic Wish Jar/hope



If you wish to receive the Pixie Dust Poet Award from her, please write an entry and link to her post labeled as Magic Wish Jar above, have fun.


Happy Weekend.

53 comments:

TALON said...

Awww! A super sad 55, Jingle!

Hope you have a super weekend!

Myrna R. said...

This touches on the feelings we're all having lately - sadness in the midst of hope.

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Very sad but beautifully written.

Yvonne,

mark said...

This really strikes a chord and is well done.

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Moving piece...

~laurie

G-Man said...

Jingle Belle
What kind of crane?
A Whooping Crane or a construction Crane?
Either way it's so delightful the way you have put this earthquake in a literary perspective.
It warms my heart.

Andy said...

Very touching poem.

Jingle said...
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Jingle said...

G-man,

My English, poor me,
a construction crane in my take of course, thanks for the smiling comment.

Cheers...
Much appreciation to your sharp sense in pointing this out.

Glad to see you take it lightly, this is a fiction in many senses...
mmmm

thingy said...

It really is heartbreaking.

Well done, Jingle.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

You did a good job, Jingle, because this 55 is so sad.

cj Schlottman said...

Jingle,

This is very touching. The idea of losing one's mate with a little one on the way brings tears to my eyes. This poem came to life for me.

Namaste..........cj

PS-Thanks for your comment on Six Word Fridays. I am in the process of reshaping that poem more to my natural style and will publish it on my poetry blog later.

Namaste.........cj

Monkey Man said...

Given the anime illustrations, this could be a non-fiction. Awesome 55.

flaubert said...

Very brave of you to write about this disaster, Jingle. Sad piece.

Pamela

Caroline said...

very very moving piece. Love it. You are amazing.

Molly @ Postcards from a Peaceful Divorce said...

Screaming and cursing your fate don't help, but continuing on with your life, with hope in your heart does.

Kelly said...

Sad to know this fiction is a tragic truth for so many new mothers in Japan.

Rachelle said...

Beautifully written. Remember, reflect, be renewed. Your heroine will surely see peace again.

ayala said...

A www so sad but lovely!

Carrie Burtt said...

You have captured the sadness in this one Jingle....wonderful writing! :-)

melissa said...

May hope persist, after sadness subsides.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Jingle,
This is not a very easy subject to sit down and write about.
Well done with this poem.

Best wishes, Eileen

Belinda said...

Sheesh! Excellent job making us all feel so sad after reading this.

2bdancing said...

Sometimes the hardest stories to tell are those that most need the telling.

Kristi said...

Very sad...but it makes us feel so that is lovely.
Thanks for stopping by today...glad I found you.

Jannie Funster said...

It really seems unfair. Mysteries and heartache we cannot understand on this sphere.

Nicely put with these words, Jingle!

xo

nan said...

Powerfully done. Concise and heart-wrenching.

Mike Patrick said...

Earthquakes and cranes do not go well together. Cannot imagine a worse place to be.

Tumblewords: said...

A touching piece!

KB said...

Beautiful poetry.

Kavita said...

Oh my... such a sad story, Ji.. beautifully written though...
Life can be so unexpected and unfair at times..

Olivia said...

Heartfelt Ji!
Very touching.. very well written!!

Hugs xx

magiceye said...

poignant

Jerry said...

Sudden impact of a hole in a life. It isn't fair sometimes.

Akelamalu said...

There must be so many people in Japan and New Zealand feeling just like that at this moment. :(

Poignant 55 Jingle.

magicinthebackyard said...

I was so thrilled to see your entry in The Wish Jar! And I come to read and I'm surprised again with this beautiful piece, perfectly suited for "hope". lovely penning! Thanks for the addition to my jar! Big hugs! xOx kellie

Mary said...

moving and sad!

Jingle said...

Yes, it seems we do share a name! I've seen you around here and there lately and thought that was funny, too! This is so beautiful...sad, but beautiful.

Mary said...

A sad but beautiful poem Jingle.

Hope you have a good weekend too.

melgallant said...

I agree with Myrna - your poem does touch on the feelings we're all experiencing of late. Here's hoping the sadness gives way soon to something brighter.

Kim Nelson said...

SO sad!

Judy Roney said...

Oh so sad, Jingle. I hope for the hope of rebuilding and getting through this. It's hard to imagine the toll this has taken and so many Lila's in Japan.

liv2write2day said...

So sad, my friend. What so many are facing right now.

Cathy said...

I agree, sad poem in light what's happening in Japen.

S said...

Thank you for visiting my blog. I am a lazy blogger now.
Your 55 is a fitting tribute to this past weeks catastrophe in japan

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Sadly evocative. Well done!

Rajlakshmi said...

awww that is such a touching write... beautiful.

Isabel Doyle said...

we shout at the stars why me? no answer

touching response

trisha said...

life really can be wicked monster sometimes.

Buddha3074 said...

So strong and sad, the loss of a loved one will always empty a part of one's heart! Excellent Jingle!

Ella said...

A poem of remembrance; So sad!
I know what kind of crane~

gayle said...

So sad but yet beautiful!

Jeanne Aguilar said...

So sad...thinking of the people in Japan...