Monday, October 17, 2011

Short Story Slam Week 12


Bluebell Books  Short Story Slam Week 12


It’s snowing outside,
The house sails like s ship 
      along the rotation of Earth,
Your mothers’ voice blows
like the floating snowflakes,
“I don’t regret what I did,
I will always be with you.”
I pull the curtain down,
and ready to turn you into a religion.
The candle is lit,
Stars and seas are fashioned around,
Please turn your face around to meet me,
I wish to stay closer,
I want to run to the edge of the river
join you,
...
The beating of your heart keeps me awake,
I envy you,
The product of a forbidden love,
Innocent and naked,
Showing no worries,
You sleep as if life is Heaven,
Thank You for keeping your face hidden,
I can hardly bear the thrill
of admiring the beauty you have shown.



14 comments:

zenmirror said...

I love the way that you use the idea of taking what you see and turning away from the window to bring it inside...I think this will take a few reads to properly appreciate it.

Kim Williams said...

in so many ways, this speaks of 'adoption.'

adoption of another point of view.
adoption of a child
adoption of life's simple mystery
adoption of an idea
adoption of change
adoption of innocence

beautiful...

keiths ramblings said...

This is quite a deep piece and I'm sure that the more I read it the more I'll get from it.

Bethe77 said...

Very deep! Very beautiful!
Expresses alot of emotion and love
Blessings

Shail Raghuvanshi said...

Your poem leaves so many hidden meanings within.....

Lena said...

I like the thought process that goes with this piece. It becomes more intriguing as you realise the baby is the result of a love affair.

Joanne said...

Perfect!
Blessings, Joanne

Ann LeFlore said...

such as perfect well told love of a Father for his child well done
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/17/to-my-son/#comment-1854

anjum artwriter said...

Beautifully expressed.Brings one to feel the depths of creation the joy of a new life, the happiness of sharing and the love of the family bond.

Ed Pilolla said...

achingly beautiful

marit said...

I agree with Kim Williams, this does speak of adoption

Teresa Marie said...

Another beautiful poem! I really loved it. You should be proud! Peace and blessings, Terri

Ina said...

This is beautiful and deep.

inaweblogisback said...

This is beautiful and deep.