Bluebell Books Short Story Slam Week 12
It’s snowing outside,
The house sails like s ship
along the rotation of Earth,
Your mothers’ voice blows
like the floating snowflakes,
“I don’t regret what I did,
I will always be with you.”
I pull the curtain down,
and ready to turn you into a religion.
The candle is lit,
Stars and seas are fashioned around,
…
Please turn your face around to meet me,
I wish to stay closer,
I want to run to the edge of the river
join you,
...
The beating of your heart keeps me awake,
I envy you,
The product of a forbidden love,
Innocent and naked,
Showing no worries,
You sleep as if life is Heaven,
Thank You for keeping your face hidden,
I can hardly bear the thrill
of admiring the beauty you have shown.
14 comments:
I love the way that you use the idea of taking what you see and turning away from the window to bring it inside...I think this will take a few reads to properly appreciate it.
in so many ways, this speaks of 'adoption.'
adoption of another point of view.
adoption of a child
adoption of life's simple mystery
adoption of an idea
adoption of change
adoption of innocence
beautiful...
This is quite a deep piece and I'm sure that the more I read it the more I'll get from it.
Very deep! Very beautiful!
Expresses alot of emotion and love
Blessings
Your poem leaves so many hidden meanings within.....
I like the thought process that goes with this piece. It becomes more intriguing as you realise the baby is the result of a love affair.
Perfect!
Blessings, Joanne
such as perfect well told love of a Father for his child well done
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/17/to-my-son/#comment-1854
Beautifully expressed.Brings one to feel the depths of creation the joy of a new life, the happiness of sharing and the love of the family bond.
achingly beautiful
I agree with Kim Williams, this does speak of adoption
Another beautiful poem! I really loved it. You should be proud! Peace and blessings, Terri
This is beautiful and deep.
This is beautiful and deep.
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