Friday, June 4, 2010

55-When You See Me Wet In The Rain




When you see me wet in the rain,
You know I am traveling
on a one-way train.
You may wonder aloud
what's all the
frowning and the
Groaning and the
Crying and the
Trying all about.
My mind stops functioning
And refuses to take
That unpaved road
As images in my brain
Begin to download.

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Write a poem that is fiction in 55 words. Give it a try and notify G-man at:
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42 comments:

Together We Save said...

Great Job!! Love it!!

magiceye said...

this is lovely!
check out my flash 55 at http://instantwords.blogspot.com

Vicki Lane said...

Very nice -- a lot of meaning in those 55 words!

Eric Alder said...

Nice!

I'll have to try working a future 55 into a poem rather than a story.

My 55 for next week is more prosaic than poetic.

Sistertex said...

Well done. Love the photo too.

Amy said...

thanks for the comment on the weeds. I have to worry about the weeds in the flower beds. They are a pain.
Thanks for your help..

croleyc69 said...

Awesome beautiful picture !!!

Caroline

lakeviewer said...

A one way train, with frowning and groaning. This is not a happy trip at all. And you're soaked. Jingle you got us worried now.

Jingle said...

Re lakeviewer:

No problem,
It is a moment of thoughts,
everything is great with me.

Re: Amy:

My pleasure.
Best wishes!

Ed Pilolla said...

you did a lot in 55 words. you got to be cute in here and i really dig the 'all the trying' line and sentiment.

DrSoosie said...

love the poem and your use of imagery! as always...thanks for brightening my day Jingle!!!

Thom said...

Excellent my friend. A lot packed in 55 words that is excellent :)

Susie said...

I love that picture!!

G-Man said...

The path of least resistance?
I think we all take that road.
Excellent 55 Jingle.
I feel quite honored to be privy to such creative talent...You Rock!
Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...Galen

Heff said...

I keep hoping one day Pamela Anderson will say those very words to ME.

Akelamalu said...

You say so much in your 55 words. :)

Amy said...

Oh my goodness! That is beautiful! Really, I am so impressed, and immersed in those words. Thank you for sharing your talent yet again!

island of peace said...

this is simply fantastic :)

steveroni said...

...and your passing thoughts became permanent words. Worth saving!

Katherine said...

Such lovely meaningful words Jingle...a great 55

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Such a refreshing poem, a pleasure to read.

Yvonne,

TALON said...

The image goes beautifully with your words, Jingle. You pack a lot of punch in 55 words!

Sniffles and Smiles said...

Oh, this is absolutely delightful! And your photo is lovely as well! I do so like your blog! Have a wonderful weekend! ~Janine XO

william said...

this was truly enjoyable, u all puzzle me how u can post more than one entry a day so for this I applaud you xx

Monkey Man said...

We all take the unpaved road. Whether traveled or not, we haven't been down it. Fine 55 and thanks for stoping by to read mine.

Dom* said...

You sit outside as a beautiful flower
Time goes by as you count the hours
You see what is coming big dark clouds
The flash of lightning and the thunder it sounds
But the thing that makes this happen has not yet
It is all about the rain and getting soaking wet

enjoy Jingle and Happy Satyrday to ya(+)
soulbro*:)

clean and crazy said...

beautiful 55 very, very well written

sheri... said...

jingle, this was beautiful! you are always surprising me with your depth and honesty, such a wonderful 55! you are such a wonderful person :)

Kimberly said...

I love your poems. They really talk to the soul.

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Menopausal New Mom said...

You poem was lovely although a bit sad? Very well done.

Bossy Betty said...

Beautiful, Jingle!

Muthering Heights said...

I like the notion of downloading images from one's brain...

Mr. Stupid said...

Nice 55. Loved it. That flower's beautiful.

˙·٠•●❤Sh@KiR@ ❤●•٠·˙ said...

Great built up and ending.
very nice.
hugs
shakira

Birdie said...

Jingle, this is a such a lovely poem! Have a beautiful weekend :-))

Just Be Real said...

Simply beautiful. Blessings.

Reader Wil said...

Clever to use exactly 55 words! ( I didn't count them however!) Thanks for your visit!

Raven said...

Simply beautiful!

Kat_RN said...

Good job. The sun is shining out my window, but I can imagine the rain.
Kat

Caty said...

Very nice Jingle...and that picture is amazing :)

Ann said...

I like the droplets on the flower. Thanks for visiting.

e.a.s. demers said...

another good one! :-)