He's gone, along with the warship, to carry out his duty in Navy in a troubled land.
Unspeakable grief unfolds, flipping its wings like startled bats.
She stands there, not being aware of upcoming affair.
After a year, he brings home a baby whose mother is not her.
Waves of the sea shiver!
Life's unfair!
*****
56 comments:
Good use of the prompt. So sad.
A tragic story, but well told.
A beautifully tragic story told so wonderfully. Thank you Anne
Beautifully written, sad, sad story!
This is a sad story, but it does happen. You told it so well!!
Well done though so poignant. At first I identified with the farewell having sent my husband off to Vietnam on 2 tours years ago. But our story ended well both times.
Beautifully written.
Indie
Tragic but truthful, I've seen it happen
So beautiful , wrote so well.
Isn't it interesting that so much can be packed into so few words? "Life is not fair." Well, there you have it. But what is fair? How can we ever be sure? Life is a series of lessons, each rich with the opportunity to grow. Your piece gives us much to think about. Good job! hugs, pat
Sad write, but it amazes me how one can write a short story in 55 words. well done.
Yvonne.
sad story in a few words.
poignant but a nice read !!!
Now that is a surprise ending! Her sadness reflects through your words.
Thanks for your visit. By the way your sight is also visually easy on the eyes.
heart get burdened up reading the end...God always gives a different twist to every story...
Lovely and sad.
=)
Although there may be many possible parts of this story that indicate sorrow...there is also a possible "happily ever after" for the Navy man and his wife and this blessed bundle of joy. I love *happily ever afters* :o) ...so, I choose to think that the husband went to war...and rescued this little baby from being an orphan...to be brought home to become a part of his and his wife's life.
Blessings & Aloha!
Thank you for visiting :o) & come back any time.
Tragic and I'm assuming this happened many times during war. Sad.
Cello Strings...
Thank You so much for your sad entry this week.
Usually I post my 55 and start the prompt at 8:00 Thursday night EST.
Thank You for visiting .
Most excellent 55 My Friend
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
A reflection of reality ... sad but true ! Life is never fair - everybody experiences this in one way or another , at some point in life .
Well done .
A reflection of reality ... sad but true ! Life is never fair - everybody experiences this in one way or another , at some point in life .
Well done .
Auch! It was so short but so well written that it kinda shocked me! Loved the feeling it caused me, thanks for sharing :)
Sadly, this story has played out so many times...definitely a case of truth in fiction.
Wow, what a well done short story. Only you left out the part where she strangles him.
Can't imagine a baby stowaway though...Maybe just a memory?
Oh my... a short sordid sad tale.
Dana
indeed......
A sad one told beautifully!!
hugs xo
These double dips on themes lead to some very good stories.
Everyone says that it is a sad story.
yet, it is sad indeed,
but, what if the child is a victim's baby her hubby adopted from the war,
which is a good thing to think about, it has a positive impact on her husband,
it is sad that the child is an orphan on that case,
agree?
Heartfelt piece ~
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So sad. Very well told. Thank you.
This is so sad, you know. But situations like this occurs. I pity the victims though.
Cheers!
Yes, life is unfair. Nicely done.
Visiting from alphabe-thursday.
Wonderful story in 55 words, and complete with a vivid picture in my mind.
Life with all its unexpected happenings. Great writing!
there is always an unexpected news for each life turn. great write on someone else's truth.
A shocking development! Aha, we all jumped to the conclusion that the baby is his. Clever to leave it ambiguous at the end.
Rosie
Such saddness and truth are held in this story.
Blessings
Touching!
Greetings from Germany,
Birgit
PS: See my T post here! :)
Funny that I used the same phrase that you used as my title. Awesome entry. Enjoyed it! :)
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Sad story fabulously told in only 55 words!
My mother used to tell me you could never trust a sailor. I asked why and she'd reply, "because they usually have a girl waiting in every port."
Who knows, this reminded me of that though.
Awwww Sad for the girl waiting.
I wonder how the other mother let the baby go? Must've broke her heart.
An AWESOME 55 that will linger in my mind.
Beautiful story and with some many possible endings...another question :will she accept the baby whatever be its origins?
Stark, cold, and heartbreaking, but beautiful because it's so simply told. :)
Elizabeth
Wow, that is a slam. Great 55.
A truly sad tale of infidelity and betrayal, and well told, too. Thank you.
A tragic story of love and betrayal. Something that happens so oftenly in life.
'Waves of the sea shiver'
Oh, what a beautiful line. Such a tragic tale poignantly and beautiful told.
This was absolutely terrific writing.
Thanks for sharing it.
A+
Sad and tragic but very well told.
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/05/the-milky-seas/
Seems to be an age-old story, but never told quite in this way. Lovely and the image makes it all the more haunting.
There is a certain beauty in its dourness, enjoyed it very much!
Ouch...RL can prove quite painful at times! Nice job!
wow. so much is conveyed in a very
short story. love this tale.
Sad that life can be so unfair...
Wow! Talk about a tug on the emotions!
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