Wednesday, August 17, 2011

I Practice Better Living!

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Pacing back and forth,
I practice better living;
Recycling myself,
I’m living off of the grids;
Aches, Acts, Reactions,
Few come to satisfactions;
Biting fingernails,
I run, ignoring dead snails,
LOVE will keep the course sailing!

*****

Manyoshu, a poetry form for The Purple Treehouse: 5-7-5-7-5-7-5-7-7

Short Story Slam Week 8:

Alphabe-Thursday: R is for Reactions, Redo one’s math to live….


58 comments:

Barbara Rosenzweig said...

Lovely poem!

The photo reminds me of the feel you get from an Andrew Wyeth painting. Serene.

ourlifeinaclick.blogspot.com said...

Cute poem!!! Gorgeous photo!

Annesphamily said...

Great poem and photo! I am always happy following the Alphabe Thursday participates.

JDaniel4's Mom said...

The images in this poem are just wonderful!

Guilie said...

Very nice... Lively, fresh, with just enough drive to make it inspirational without dropping into harrying. Very nice. Thanks for sharing!

beckyp said...

great poem Love the photo

Vintagesouthernlife said...

Beautiful!

welcome to my world of poetry said...

Good poem with a wonderful message,

Yvonne.

MorningAJ said...

Sounds almost like a chant. Love it! (except for the poor snails)

Jyoti Mishra said...

simply superb !!

Marbles in My Pocket said...

The finishing line is perfect! Very nicely done!

Here's my week 8 story: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/amber-waves-of-grain/

West Lake said...

love this one...

madhumakhi said...

Excellent Choka. The last line has such great meaning. I also like the 'aches, acts' alliteration.

Fred said...

Really nice poem. Greatly enjoyed the write, thanks:)

inaweblogisback said...

Lovely, the poem and the picture :)

Sue said...

Very nice!

=)

Lolamouse said...

Lovely poem and I like the sentiment. I've never heard of that form before. Nice job with it.

Timoteo said...

Nice write. I tried recycling myself by climbing into the bin, but they said I belonged to the category of items that they wouldn't pick up.

Ed Pilolla said...

lovely poem. i like how you open with pacing, the concept of not getting anywhere, and close with another gerund, sailing, with a much different meaning. was that planned or organic? either way it's a rich detail in the most powerful spots.

kweschn said...

Awesome poem! :) Following your suggestion, here is mine:

http://kweschn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/the-girl-who-gazes/ :)

Cheers

beccagivens said...

I have enjoyed reading your take on this image ... inspirational message ~~ great job!

The Unknowngnome said...

Very enjoyable read.

benjity said...

I love this poem. And I'm excited to find a new poetry publishing place.
http://www.benjity.wordpress.com

dc said...

Excellent - really enjoyed it

pandamoniumcat said...

Lovely words!

Quotes,Photos and a little Poetry said...

That was a lovely poem and I like picture.

dakshi said...

wonderful poem....

Old Raven said...

Jingle, how lovely to compose ... ones own composure. A lovely poem!

Judie said...

You're good! You're VERY VERY good! Oh, and versatile, too!!!

jennifaye said...

Cute. "I run, ignoring dead snails," made me smile. :)

Tina said...

Nice photo :)

mindsinger said...

I like your writing! Concise and to the point.

Kay said...

Oh, love always keeps the course sailing . . . Beautifully! So nice :)

pure2core said...

oh! wow! how sweet short and crip poetry...

Cheryl D. said...

Great poem!

MISH said...

A good job !

booguloo said...

I like it.

cinnamonblues said...

Imaginative poem - really enjoyed reading it :)

dan roberson said...

Love always works to keep things going. Greeat poem.

johnewordslinger said...

Interesting, I know the feeling, written well, and love the ending, thank you, WS

BornStoryteller said...

Thank you for the comment. I like yours too.

Outlawyer said...
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manicddaily said...

A good practice. Aches/acts/ reactions hard to get away from.

dsnake1 said...

lovely images! love the last line. :)

poetryroad said...

Sweet, light, and creative!

Chim's World of Literature said...

This was a beautiful poem nd the form fitted well.
Thanks for stopping by my blog :)

Bethe77 said...

Beautiful!
Blessings

Lena said...

Packaged and posted perfectly. A neat little read!

Isadora said...

Outstanding ... well done.
Isadora

Teresa Marie said...

Hi Jingle! I really liked your poem a lot!! I hope that I did mine right. I tried to do 5-7 5-7 5-7-7. Please let me know what you think and if I did do it right. I've never tried this before but thought that I would give it a shot :) Peace and love, Terri

bendedspoon said...

so lovely, so lively! love the inclusion of the snails ;)

Mark said...

Great stuff, I get a real sense of feelings, thoughts, intuitions and sensations flowing through your prose.

Jenny said...

Wow. This was lovely writing.

The imagery you created with your words was perfect. And the photo really helped bring it to life.

Thanks for linking up.

A+

Heaven said...

very lovely form~

meaningful message too~

e.a.s. demers said...

wonderful take on the prompt...
I do feel bad for the snails, though :-(

Imperfect said...

Incredible. Short and concise, but not lacking in impact. :)

Dawn said...

The hope of love is beautiful :)
keep up the good work
Cheers

Lord Emmanuel said...

I enjoyed this one and the last line is priceless. :)

Cheers!