PPacing back and forth,
I practice better living;
Recycling myself,
I’m living off of the grids;
Aches, Acts, Reactions,
Few come to satisfactions;
Biting fingernails,
I run, ignoring dead snails,
LOVE will keep the course sailing!
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Manyoshu, a poetry form for The Purple Treehouse: 5-7-5-7-5-7-5-7-7
Short Story Slam Week 8:
Alphabe-Thursday: R is for Reactions, Redo one’s math to live….
57 comments:
Lovely poem!
The photo reminds me of the feel you get from an Andrew Wyeth painting. Serene.
Cute poem!!! Gorgeous photo!
Great poem and photo! I am always happy following the Alphabe Thursday participates.
The images in this poem are just wonderful!
Very nice... Lively, fresh, with just enough drive to make it inspirational without dropping into harrying. Very nice. Thanks for sharing!
great poem Love the photo
Beautiful!
Good poem with a wonderful message,
Yvonne.
Sounds almost like a chant. Love it! (except for the poor snails)
simply superb !!
The finishing line is perfect! Very nicely done!
Here's my week 8 story: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/amber-waves-of-grain/
love this one...
Excellent Choka. The last line has such great meaning. I also like the 'aches, acts' alliteration.
Really nice poem. Greatly enjoyed the write, thanks:)
Lovely, the poem and the picture :)
Very nice!
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Lovely poem and I like the sentiment. I've never heard of that form before. Nice job with it.
Nice write. I tried recycling myself by climbing into the bin, but they said I belonged to the category of items that they wouldn't pick up.
lovely poem. i like how you open with pacing, the concept of not getting anywhere, and close with another gerund, sailing, with a much different meaning. was that planned or organic? either way it's a rich detail in the most powerful spots.
Awesome poem! :) Following your suggestion, here is mine:
http://kweschn.wordpress.com/2011/08/18/the-girl-who-gazes/ :)
Cheers
I have enjoyed reading your take on this image ... inspirational message ~~ great job!
Very enjoyable read.
I love this poem. And I'm excited to find a new poetry publishing place.
http://www.benjity.wordpress.com
Excellent - really enjoyed it
Lovely words!
That was a lovely poem and I like picture.
wonderful poem....
Jingle, how lovely to compose ... ones own composure. A lovely poem!
You're good! You're VERY VERY good! Oh, and versatile, too!!!
Cute. "I run, ignoring dead snails," made me smile. :)
Nice photo :)
I like your writing! Concise and to the point.
Oh, love always keeps the course sailing . . . Beautifully! So nice :)
oh! wow! how sweet short and crip poetry...
Great poem!
A good job !
I like it.
Imaginative poem - really enjoyed reading it :)
Love always works to keep things going. Greeat poem.
Interesting, I know the feeling, written well, and love the ending, thank you, WS
A good practice. Aches/acts/ reactions hard to get away from.
lovely images! love the last line. :)
Sweet, light, and creative!
This was a beautiful poem nd the form fitted well.
Thanks for stopping by my blog :)
Beautiful!
Blessings
Packaged and posted perfectly. A neat little read!
Outstanding ... well done.
Isadora
Hi Jingle! I really liked your poem a lot!! I hope that I did mine right. I tried to do 5-7 5-7 5-7-7. Please let me know what you think and if I did do it right. I've never tried this before but thought that I would give it a shot :) Peace and love, Terri
so lovely, so lively! love the inclusion of the snails ;)
Great stuff, I get a real sense of feelings, thoughts, intuitions and sensations flowing through your prose.
Wow. This was lovely writing.
The imagery you created with your words was perfect. And the photo really helped bring it to life.
Thanks for linking up.
A+
very lovely form~
meaningful message too~
wonderful take on the prompt...
I do feel bad for the snails, though :-(
Incredible. Short and concise, but not lacking in impact. :)
The hope of love is beautiful :)
keep up the good work
Cheers
I enjoyed this one and the last line is priceless. :)
Cheers!
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