I'm a boat,
You are the water,
You are the water,
My life is the wind that keeps me afloat
And sail cross the border.
.
You allow me to keep going
to erase life’s pain,
Although knowing
that we may lose each other again.
.
The future is unknown,
Yet you refuse to frown,
You sing me the most beautiful song
while I’m stuck and alone.
.
Like daughter,
Like father,
You are the water
that supports me to go further.
*****
Short Story Slam Week 22
33 comments:
What a bond felt in each word...
Lovely, simply well written with loads of emotions spilled in form..
Has a haunting feel too at some places, and yet makes one glee of the verse..Nice!
Love all the metaphors in the first stanza!
Beautiful. The image of the boat on the water is so strong, such power in the nature of the relationship. Thank you for sharing this, Jingle.
This is a beautiful piece. It almost made me cry.I know I've said this before, but you are a gift.
I read this and I thought of my Dad...this was beautiful! Thank You! Blessings, Joanne
Awww this is so sweet Jingle and I agree wonderful use of metaphors
I enjoyed your poem , I have been on vacation to Canada and the US and have just got back into the Bitish way of life.
Have a peaceful Sunday.
Yvonne.
beautifully conveyed :)
lovely write Jingle
Beautiful poem, and I get a sense of the father who is quietly supporting the flow.
Hi I know you are involved in other aspects of poetry writing such as poetry of the day etc but I can never get through to the events that are going on.Could you enlighten me how to do so?
Thank you.
Yvonne.
Loved the flow and the sentiments expressed, a certainly cool perspective!
this is so beautifully written
This perfectly describes what it is to feel safe..just lovely!
Touching write.
Beautiful sentiments. Brought a lump to my throat.
Glad I stopped on this one.
Thanks for sharing, Ji.
Terrificly positive, as always. : )
Lovely. Your poetry is always so uplifting.
beautiful poem
This is a wonderful poem. One needs the other... Terrific! :)
Nice sentiments.
I love the idea of water as supporter.
Really nice poem. nice imagery, thanks:)
Nicely put - a really warm and lovely poem
Nice..! I loved it.
i like the metaphors and the flow of the words....the emotions spilled well out.
meaningful and beautiful! :-)
wow, very lovely!
Like the metaphor of the boat and water, very effective
Kind regards
Luke x
You are so gifted and so eloquently express what you are feeling!
this was nice. thanks for sharing. :]
and thanks, too, for reading picky and leaving it some love.
amazing poetry.
love this.
beautiful and could only be written by a parent ( I think ) thank you for sharing this lovely piece x
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