Friday, March 18, 2011
Big Tent Poetry/Thursday Thinking Tank in 55 Words-Life Could Be So Unaffair
Lila cried her heart out.
Her hubby was hit by a crane
and is gone,
Leaving her and her unborn baby alone...
He had been a gentleman,
Everything was perfect in between
until the earthquake,
Now She wanted to scream,
But does that help?
Life could be so unfair,
She murmured, eyes making empty stare.
This is my entry 4 Flash Friday 55 at G-Man’s,
Thursday Thinking Tank at Poets United: Hope
Belinda’s Hope Effort
and Big Tent Poetry: Stuck /New Hope,
I added this post to Magic In The Backyard's wish Jar: Magic Wish Jar/hope
If you wish to receive the Pixie Dust Poet Award from her, please write an entry and link to her post labeled as Magic Wish Jar above, have fun.
Posted by Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall at 7:24 AM
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Awww! A super sad 55, Jingle!
Hope you have a super weekend!
This touches on the feelings we're all having lately - sadness in the midst of hope.
Very sad but beautifully written.
This really strikes a chord and is well done.
What kind of crane?
A Whooping Crane or a construction Crane?
Either way it's so delightful the way you have put this earthquake in a literary perspective.
It warms my heart.
Very touching poem.
My English, poor me,
a construction crane in my take of course, thanks for the smiling comment.
Much appreciation to your sharp sense in pointing this out.
Glad to see you take it lightly, this is a fiction in many senses...
It really is heartbreaking.
Well done, Jingle.
You did a good job, Jingle, because this 55 is so sad.
This is very touching. The idea of losing one's mate with a little one on the way brings tears to my eyes. This poem came to life for me.
PS-Thanks for your comment on Six Word Fridays. I am in the process of reshaping that poem more to my natural style and will publish it on my poetry blog later.
Given the anime illustrations, this could be a non-fiction. Awesome 55.
Very brave of you to write about this disaster, Jingle. Sad piece.
very very moving piece. Love it. You are amazing.
Screaming and cursing your fate don't help, but continuing on with your life, with hope in your heart does.
Sad to know this fiction is a tragic truth for so many new mothers in Japan.
Beautifully written. Remember, reflect, be renewed. Your heroine will surely see peace again.
A www so sad but lovely!
You have captured the sadness in this one Jingle....wonderful writing! :-)
May hope persist, after sadness subsides.
This is not a very easy subject to sit down and write about.
Well done with this poem.
Best wishes, Eileen
Sheesh! Excellent job making us all feel so sad after reading this.
Sometimes the hardest stories to tell are those that most need the telling.
Very sad...but it makes us feel so that is lovely.
Thanks for stopping by today...glad I found you.
It really seems unfair. Mysteries and heartache we cannot understand on this sphere.
Nicely put with these words, Jingle!
Powerfully done. Concise and heart-wrenching.
Earthquakes and cranes do not go well together. Cannot imagine a worse place to be.
A touching piece!
Oh my... such a sad story, Ji.. beautifully written though...
Life can be so unexpected and unfair at times..
Very touching.. very well written!!
Sudden impact of a hole in a life. It isn't fair sometimes.
There must be so many people in Japan and New Zealand feeling just like that at this moment. :(
Poignant 55 Jingle.
I was so thrilled to see your entry in The Wish Jar! And I come to read and I'm surprised again with this beautiful piece, perfectly suited for "hope". lovely penning! Thanks for the addition to my jar! Big hugs! xOx kellie
moving and sad!
Yes, it seems we do share a name! I've seen you around here and there lately and thought that was funny, too! This is so beautiful...sad, but beautiful.
A sad but beautiful poem Jingle.
Hope you have a good weekend too.
I agree with Myrna - your poem does touch on the feelings we're all experiencing of late. Here's hoping the sadness gives way soon to something brighter.
Oh so sad, Jingle. I hope for the hope of rebuilding and getting through this. It's hard to imagine the toll this has taken and so many Lila's in Japan.
So sad, my friend. What so many are facing right now.
I agree, sad poem in light what's happening in Japen.
Thank you for visiting my blog. I am a lazy blogger now.
Your 55 is a fitting tribute to this past weeks catastrophe in japan
Sadly evocative. Well done!
awww that is such a touching write... beautiful.
we shout at the stars why me? no answer
life really can be wicked monster sometimes.
So strong and sad, the loss of a loved one will always empty a part of one's heart! Excellent Jingle!
A poem of remembrance; So sad!
I know what kind of crane~
So sad but yet beautiful!
So sad...thinking of the people in Japan...
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