While I’m withheld on the top part,
I feel intense and strong,
As I fall down to the lower part,
I go inspired and hope for a restart.
.
Grains of sand I’m considered as,
Don’t you think I’m grain of children,
Feeling timid for changes,
Yet, I must accept the ups and downs life arranges.
.
Randomly,
We encounter and squeeze to be the first,
You and me,
We are forced to visit the virtue of friendships, wisdom, and honesty.
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dVerse Poetics: Change
One Single Impression: Seeking
50 comments:
i like the middle stanza...it bears the weight of truth for me...and has a nice flow...
accepting the ups and downs is a key i guess...and nice play on the hour glass..
yes, life is full of ups and downs... and nice metaphor of the hourglass life ~
Wise words Cello, and children must be led by the hand for some while.
Hank
"Grains of sand I’m considered as,"
Excellent expression of just how finite life can be...really enjoyed your poem.
Ah, so true. A very wise piece. : )
So interesting to compare grains of sand and grains of children. Life a long journey (we hope.)
K.
This is so lovely, and honest. I love it!! Blessings, Terri
And when it all reaches the bottom, life somehow flips it upside down and it all begins agsin.
Lovely.
Hello.
"Feeling timid for changes,Yet I must accept the ups and downs life arranges.." how true those words are for many of us.
Nice imagery.
Thanks for sharing & visiting. I appreciate the comment.
Beautiful Woman Of My Heart
Cello ... you are so right within your words here. These: "We encounter and squeeze to be the first," especially struck me.
Ups and downs you portray them well, great verse.
as i fall down the lower part, i go inspired and hope for a restart..so much truth...nice work
you send many messages of truth and hope and also the hardships of change here. enjoyed each line.
I love your use of the hourglass to illustrate the changes of life. Very creative--especially when mentioning children.
i enjoyed the way you concluded your poem
Nicely written and arranged poem!
Yes, well said. And what is it about being the first that so motivates us?
This one's got some grit ;-)
Nice metaphor, I like it - the fullness, the narrow passage, the breath of acceptance that begins life in its various aspects... Well done.
What a great metaphor. Thought-provoking poem.
I love the way the poem flows, pun intended. I also like the reference to the ups and downs of life. lovely.xx
I love the ups and tolerate the downs. Great flow and tons of truth.
Thank you for the visit to my blog. I like the image you chose through which to frame this poem. No way there isn't change going on in an hourglass, unless turned on its side.
like the double entendre message here.
great replication of what a grain of sand might think.
cool idea. thanks.
Change is difficult to accept, yet in the struggle, we still fight for the climb to the top. An amazing write. Thank you!
lovely it is
Awesome verses, deep meaning and brilliant message !!
Excellent! Change is important! :)
nicely written... and thoughtful one... :)
Thank you!
truth and wisdom beautifully packed in lovely verse ...
beautifully crafted!
Wow, I can so relate to this hour glass feel! Cello you painted the mood so well, with your imagery!
I love these lines:
"Grains of sand I’m considered as,
Don’t you think I’m grain of children,
Feeling timid for changes,
Yet, I must accept the ups and downs life arranges"
I can so relate to this stanza; so well said!
This is very nice!
you are very insightful. It's all about reaching a different plane.
As we learn and grow more and more we will one day reach the plane of enlightenment we were meant to be in.
:)
Happy Thanks giving :)
Beautiful words! Thanks for the visit.
Kim, USA
A well said analogy of the sands passing through the hourglass. Nice one!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/11/23/the-last-grain-of-sand/
So nicely stated. Lovely poem.
lovely....
"Feeling timid for changes,Yet I must accept the ups and downs life arranges."
wow....
All we need it to have someone to turn our hourglass over now and then. Delightful
Interesting metaphor!
Very nice poem. Thank you for your thanksgiving wishes. Take care. Keep writing.
Hey Jb here just wanted to say that
Thanksgiving was great. I want to thank you for visiting and leaving a comment.
the ups and downs of life...we all have them, best to accept them.
I like the use of up and downs, with the sand also being up and down in the timer.Intentional?
Jamie
wise words poetically put ....thank you x
Great flow here, both of words and the sentiment behind them. Thank you for sharing.
The first stanza sets up the poem very nicely. Very enjoyable.
William
Nicely imagined. Loved your last line. Thanks so much for visiting my blog.
Some profound truths in this one! Well done :-)
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