Why do we must dye our life?
Do I have to stay put indefinitely?
Look around, we have nature to worship,
Cryptograms to decode,
I walk around the park,
My mind is listless,
The wind is flirting with the starless sky,
I’m glad I didn’t detonate.
Birds hesitate to leave behind their old tree friend,
Winter rattles and signs in disorder,
Dead leaves mourn over their removal from trees,
I pray for you, in dimness…
I like the wind flirting with the starless sky...lovely!
Some lovely lines in this one. Very nice!
I agree some lovely lines..well done
thought provoking lineS!!
Looks like a lot is going on in the mind of the person in poem ..
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I have to say that I agree with ayala. The entire poem is quite something, but these words caught hold of me:
My mind is listless,
The wind is flirting with the starless sky
I can see it and even though my mind doesn't know quite which way to go, it follows the wind and the smell of Autumn as together they flirt with the sky.
This made me see some wonderful pictures in my mind. Thanks so much for sharing.
Great work!! inspiring!
Great poem. I love the last line.
Here is my entry:
I admit I'm not really a poetry buff but there are pictures in my inner vision that have been invoked by your poem.
I see a young girl desperate to move on and see the world, someone who wants to be like the swallows who rejoice in the freshness of the wind on a starless night as they playfully travel from north to south and back again.
A girl who is tired of trying to please other people instead of discarding the dead leaves of her life, making way for the fresh growth in the coming season.
I see her wanting to lift her eyes to the creator instead of being stuck with only what can be seen, tired of the hopelessness of negativity.
I see pictures when I read this poem.
A good read, Geoff.
Love it , great job.
great imagery thank you for sharing xx
An awesome poem, thanks for sharing it. Thank you for stopping by! Happy and gorgeous new week to you. Greetings from Rio de Janeiro/Brasil. Please come back soon!
There are so many wonderful elements in this piece..why must we dye our life...cryptograms to decode...Nice work!!
Very nice. Thank you for sharing. Blessings.
You may not have detonated but this poem took off! Good work!
I like the tension between the stillness and the motion. The staying put and the moving on. Nice, reflective piece.
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